[Veritas]

I'm doing all right, thank you. What I mean by "going into too much detail" is that you are not creating a "word picture" in your readers' minds. You need to describe the time, place, setting, and the characters more so that your readers will be drawn into the story. For example, when you left off the little "bedroom scene" with "...and it went on from there..." you left your readers hanging. What went on from there? Don't be afraid to go into more detail in your stories. It will make them richer. When I wrote "Baptism of Fire", I did a lot of painstaking research about Tarot cards, the Wiccan movement, as well as about earthquakes in the Southwestern US before I typed a single line. It's the details that holds a reader's interest, not just the narrative.